Tattoos (Collab with Lebanese Phoenix)

This collab is really good. Both your writting styles flowed together with ease and it was hard to tell this poem was written by two people as everything just clicked and went into place.

This poem makes for a great read and I loved it from start to end.

5/5

Great collab !

How convenient that
you would choose to forget
what I want you to remember -

and...

what I want you to forget,
you would choose to remember

-----The tone on this lines sounds sarcastic yet somehow ironic to me and it made me think about the things that I want to forget but that I can't forget and the things that I wish to remember but I forget them.
But most of the times, the more I think about them and I try no to forget them makes me forget them haha... kind of weird. An example is birthday's, I remember them like one month before and I keep reminding myself and the exact day I forget. Well, I deviated from the topic again, but I shall get back to it. I really like the way you guys started this piece.

"Was I that much
of a burden, you
had to rip the skin
off my flesh -"

"There was no room for weakness,
for I chose to forget
like you always did..."

----- I found this lines to be the most powerful of this piece along with the last stanza.

I chose to breathe
under water, and since then
I've been drowning in the deep.

---Now the ending, the ending just impressed me.
I chose to breathe under water.. its kind of saying that you decided to continue breathing where you are not supposed to. You had the choice to go to the surface but still you preferred to be under water. Either because its refreshing or because it might be good for relaxation or because one can get lost in their own thoughts. unfortunately, if one stays too long under the water, one can immediately know how things will turned out. Someone will drown at anytime. What I understood from this piece , don't stay too long under water if you see that you have no more oxygen left, swim to the surface and breathe fresh air.

Well done you two. This is awesome.

Sometimes a collab is just a poem, it may flow nicely and be a great read. Other times the two click and become one poet I think that happened in this case. A masterpiece in my opinion.

Wow...
You can picture the whole image playing out in your head as you read it. The title made me curious.

It instantly draws you in to continuing on reading. You guys made an amazing poem<3.

The way you guys ended it was brilliant. I'm kinda lost for words for what to say.

But this is great :)
5/5