Your Eyes [Acrostic]

by Boy   Apr 29, 2012


You have an amazing Gift
over a million years it wont come
under the sky and on the earth
reflecting my love infront of world

Every time it makes me wordless
yours special belongings to me
End of my deep imaginations
so beautiful Your Eyes are.

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  • 7 years ago

    by Yakori bint Muhammed

    Its amazing how you praised the beauty of the eyes within few lines. The flow is so flawless, it kept flowing and one forgets its an acrostic piece. Lines are simply charming. This is an exemplary poem for all to read and be engaged in the calmness it exudes. Kudos!

  • 7 years ago

    by Georgia

    Simple and short but this is a great write. 5/5

  • 7 years ago

    by Paul Gondwe

    You have an amazing Gift
    over a million years it wont come
    under the sky and on the earth
    reflecting my love infront of world

    This is a good description of something you value in your love. And i must say, a very good way to start this poem. I would just suggest you put some commas so that the poem flows even better

    Every time it makes me wordless
    yours special belongings to me
    End of my deep imaginations
    so beautiful Your Eyes are.

    Its funny how we want to talk bu to fail to talk because we just dont have the words to describe what we see or feel. I would say this is a great acoustic. You have done an amazing job and truly this deserved to be nominated.

  • 7 years ago

    by Yrem Crish

    This acrostic is meaningful and really sweet...emotionally written, yeah. Great piece!
    5/5

  • 7 years ago

    by Xanthe

    If you haven't mentioned that this is an acrostic, I wouldn't have known it is. This is really sweet, especially to the one you've written it for.
    Just a couple of criticisms to make this better:
    "reflecting my love infront of world"
    ---add 'the' between 'of' and 'world' because 'world' is a specific noun here.
    "Every time it makes me wordless"
    ---I'd rather it was 'Every time it leaves me speechless', but this one left your signature on the piece. Nice..
    "yours special belongings to me"
    ---This one was off, I suggest you revise it.
    "End of my deep imaginations
    so beautiful Your Eyes are."
    ---At first read, I didn't get this but I read it again and again, and I'm glad I did. I think this meant that whenever you are in deep thought, and you see her eyes, no matter what, her eyes captures your undivided attention. I may be wrong, but I really like that.
    Well done. Keep writing :)
    -X