Nana has written about every color and every tree mense,

I actually dig this a lot.
its so simple and refreshing and that little rhyme.. me gusta..

xoxo

Very well penned and matrixed piece Ms SunShine. Keep on penning.

Well you have written about every color..

I saw a snow that was blue somewhere
Then there was this bread that was brown...

then there was a sun in a tree somewhere
or it sun tree? I also think there was a green apple.. a yellow thingy..

you put the sun in everything..
wild red gloss like dem lips in a poem too...

you always have good endings.

When I read your old poems I think you're eminem..

Your style has change a lot.

I still like when you're done being young and beautiful best..

You have a cute face.

sometimes I want to be Arab because Arab bread is yummy. xoxo

xoxoxo

I love what you've done here hun. The images of all the colours is beautiful. It makes me think of how certain colours have different meanings and I see that you have incorporated this into your poem, especially with purple as I have heard that means royalty.

I love the rhyming and repetition of this poem. It makes it more enjoyable to read but also makes your point define even more. You talk about colours and match a colour to the way you are feeling, to how you are feeling. I love that. I can see the darkness in this poem but also the sadness as well, as when you talk about colours missing, makes me think that there's something missing in your life - colours of happiness.

Certainly an enjoyable, AWESOME read for me. LOVED IT

x

This is a very unique piece and awesome to read.

Great imagery, a good pace to the poem, I hate poems that leave you tongue tied and you stumble on the words. This does neither, Everything is artificial, it is amazing how much co exists with superficial. good stuff. regards.

Haha! I have to agree with Yaki lmao. I love how you incorporate colours and kitchen stuff with your emotions. Just creative. ;D

This is quite different, but I absolutely love it.

This is lovely, Rania. One of my favourites from you.

Such simple imagery. The repetition and listing adds to a feeling of helplessness and sorrow. The purple tree image is strange but wonderful. I wasn't keen on the elipses because it slowed the poem down, and I don't think it added anything.

I think you've developed a lot as a writer, and whilst I wasn't a fan of all your previous work, you're not afraid to say what you want to say. Some of your work is beautiful and bashful, others are strange and chaotic. Glad to see your work again!

Awesome, I was intrigued by the title, as I had no idea what the poem would be about and was surprised to read this but glad I did as it was very well written and a lot of powerful words were used. i liked the layout of each stanza too, this worked well to break it up.

Very creative poem, well done.