The sands of time

I think was a romantic and very sweet write, I am not crazy on it though as I find it cliche in parts and would have liked to see different wording but still a nice piece.
xxx

I think that this is a beautiful poem, that really emphasizes the love two people can share. :)

Wonderful imagery and a very romantic poem. great job! :)

Typos: second stanza, capitalize the 'h' on her since it is the beginning of a sentence. Also, 'enchating' is supposed to be 'enchanting.' Third stanza, get rid of the period at the end because you are continuing the sentence in the next stanza. Also make it so that the 'S' in 'Straight' is a lower case letter. Fourth stanza, last word 'exsisted' is supposed to be 'existed.' Fifth stanza, second line 'suger' is supposed to be 'sugar.' Also I would capitalize the 'i' as well. Seventh stanza, make the 'T' a 't' in 'The' because you are once again continuing the sentence from the last stanza. Also, capitalize the 'i.' I am only trying to help, it is your choice to change these or not :) These are what I would have done if this was my opinion.

This is a beautiful poem you have here. The imagery is extravagant as in all of your poems, or at least in the ones that I have read so far...

"As she puts her hand in mine like
a thousand fingers caressing
my body it sends a
lightning bolt.

Straight to my heart and creates
a heatbeat i never knew existed."

^ I have to say that this is my favorite part because you talk about how love feels - a lightning bolt straight to the heart. That is beautiful in my opinion :)

"The sun gives ways to the beauty
of the night, as her neon eyes
sparkle in natures night light
i know for us."

^ Give 'natures' an apostrophe 's' so that it becomes 'nature's.' The night light is a possessive thing... This is beautiful as well. Beautiful imagery.

If you fix those errors, everything will be perfect.

Excellent poem
5/5