The peaceful silence of death

Thanks I'll try that with my nxt poem

Sad and well known feelings, when everything just seems so bleak and without emotions that you just wish for it all to end... Good job,keep it up! Although I would suggest you try to write a piece in quatrains(if that`s the word, not sure, i mean when you write like i 4 or so lines roughly same length with a lil of rhyme behind them) because I think you are doing quite good job there and I think you can handle that ^^.

P.S. It would look something like -

Hearing voices in my head.
Telling me I'm worthless and better dead.
Crying out amongst the noise.
Screams from my throat not connecting to my voice.

although then you could prolong or shorter some lines to make it about roughly same length, like -

Laying still I hear whispers in my head;
Telling me I'm worthless and better off dead.
Crying out amongst the overwhelming noise.
Screams from my throat can`t to my voice.

Just my opinion of course, not pushing anything on you! Take care and keep on writing ^^

Thanks

Nice poem