Tonight, I am crying

by Chelsey   Sep 3, 2012


My heart is a wrecking ball,
plunging into concrete that conceals
battered emotions. I envy those
who ink their skin and stain their diaries,
with words that define their state of mind.
(My thoughts can never be revealed)

I gasp for breath on nights where
anxiety plays the role of oxygen,
crawling through air ways that are now
plagued with a suffocating attack.
(I surrender my inhalations.)

My life has now become a mosh pit.
Colliding every aspect into shoulders
of another. Violently pushing unto
a back, that's spine has weakened
from forceful acts of the past.
(I deny its use these days.)

Tonight, I am crying unto walls
that once bordered prayers .
Clearly, burdens have prevailed
over favorable expectations.
(I wonder if He still hears me?)

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  • 11 years ago

    by Stephen

    Oh wow, this is amazing. I bet it felt good to write this and get it out of your system. It's full of emotion, which I love, and you express every thought in great detail.. You made me feel almost as if I were living it, instead of reading the words you wrote. I love this poem, and just so you know, He is still listening and can hear you just fine. :) Chin up and smile, life always gets better.

  • 11 years ago

    by AngelDust

    I was reading this yesterday trying to comment from my phone but it wouldn't let me and then I log in to find a lovely comment from you. This piece certainly breaks hearts and I'm sorry that you feel so raw. You wrote this with such strong emotion but you've always been brilliant at doing so. I wish you weren't feeling so hurt because you are such a gem. The wording and structure of this is what I like most. I wish you well :-)

    Danika.

  • 11 years ago

    by One Man Clan

    Well then, on a bright note, You must be thankful for the way that made you feel this way, For it gave the birth for what I truly believe is an epic poem that is so much worthy of praise.

    I for one can feel the amount of grief displayed
    these emotions were so real that you've kept me guessing on whether you'd specify exactly what it is that would you make feel this way
    and you did((I wonder if He still hears me?)

    and honestly speaking
    from where did you get the inspiration to write lines like these?

    I gasp for breath on nights where
    anxiety plays the role of oxygen,

    you truly are a mastermind when it comes to poetry, 5/5 and I would nominate this in a heartbeat if I could
    God bless

  • 11 years ago

    by Darren

    Chelsey this is exceptional, so much emotion in this. I love the after thought at the end of each stanza.
    The analogies such as the concrete concealing battered emotions ties in perfectly with the 'wrecking ball' part just before.
    The reference to the mosh pit is great, you can almost picture it as you read it.

    You have a talent for detail and portraying emotion, plus there is so much clever word use here.

    The last line rounds the whole thing off superbly.

    I will be back to nominate this once I get my votes.

  • 11 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    What can I say? You truly are a writer who can pour out the feelings like no other... I just cried with you... this is a poem where many can relate too. I often find myself lurking above as Im writing about my endless sorrow... and within this poem you captured that moment... in a very creative way... love this!

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