Amreen (Haikus)

by Khalid M Darwish   Sep 9, 2012


Likes whispers
of young tweeting birds
scarping worms

She prefers
Non-complicated
simple life

fears sorts of
abnormalities
can't cease fears

Hope I'll be
as much kindhearted
as Amreen

* All haikus are 3/5/3
* Dedicated to Amreen for her kind support of many members in P & Q

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  • 13 years ago

    by BREEawNUHH

    I often find it very difficult to do friendship poems, but you've done a great job here! I only have one suggestion.

    "Hope I'll be
    as much kindhearted
    as Amreen"

    `I'm thinking the second line doesn't quite roll off the tongue as well as it could. Perhaps something like..

    "Hope I'll be
    just as kindhearted <--- still 5 syllables. :)
    as Amreen"

    Hope this helps!

    5/5

    `Briana

  • 13 years ago

    by L

    Aww.. this is a sweet dedication to Amreen.

    She is a sweet girl and you described her well here. Thank you for the note.

    I counted as usual, and yup, it's 3-5-3.
    well done.

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