Been Too Many Years

Oh my.. this poem has definitely touched me. I remember camping outdoors with my family years ago. I am speechless.

Trees above, dirt below
The wind in our ears
The campfire's glow...
It's been too many years

^ I like how you made the start of the poem simple as this draws the reader in and doesn't weight them down. Your flow in this stanza was excellent too.

Where everyone's gracious
Tents litter the ground
Mozzis are tenacious
And the space is renowned

^ I really liked how this stanza flowed so well from the last. It also made me a little curious and gave me the drive to read on.

The stars shine bright
With no city lights to intrude
It's a beautiful sight
And seem to simply accrue

The dusty taste of water
The smoky taste of food
Comes with being the daughter
Of the camping-clued

^ These two above stanza's are very well penned and I loved how you described things like the taste of the water and food. It gave the poem more life.

Sleeping bags and campfires
Roasted marshmallows too
And all the camping attire
Is an experience you must do

^ The happiness in this stanza really got at me. I liked how your encouraging the reader to try camping. You are giving the reader something to think about.

The beauty of the outdoors
Is worth forgetting all your fears
Such simplicity and explores...
It's been too many years

^ This stanza was a beautiful way to end the poem however the last line makes me feel sad as it implies that you haven't been camping in a long time and it is something you loved. It also implies that maybe someone you use to go camping with is no longer around. Your ending has really got me thinking.

As you can see I have listed all the positive I found in the piece I just have one negative which is even though I like the poem alot and would read it again I feel it lacks emotion in the middle of the piece. Like I said a great poem with a beautiful ending just think it would be a little better if there was more emotion in the middle of the piece

That said great read

5/5