Looking Up Into The Sky

by ilgrl   Sep 16, 2012


Looking up into the sky

Sometimes makes me want to cry

Because I know you are up there

Watching over me with such great care

I often think of how you are

Way up there so very far

I know you are at peace

I know that you can rest

I know you tried to stay wiht us

You fought real hard

You did your best

But it wasn't meant to be

God called you home instead

You rode up on an angel's wings

To that big place in the sky

God always calls us home

That is a certain fact

Heaven's where we'll meet again

God will make sure of that

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  • 11 years ago

    by Mr Universe

    This is just dripping with emotion. My grandma took her life in 2001 so, though my scars have healed, I know it's a tremendous loss. I really like your use of repetition in "I know you are at peace... I know you did your best." It flowed well. I would recommend omitting the "to try and fight" as it's redundant of the past two lines. "There" not "their" in lines 3 and 6. And maybe consider revising the last five or six lines to improve flow or return to your original rhyming patter, it seems choppy as is. I'm nitpicking, sure, but only because I really like this one. Great read.

    • 11 years ago

      by ilgrl

      Thank you for your comments and suggestions. i've been meaning to revise it just haven't gotten around to it. I lost my original copy and had to write this by memory and I know its not how I wrote it on paper..

  • 11 years ago

    by Amreen

    This is so sad and gloomy.... your emotions seemed so innocent here.... I liked the flow of the poem and you did a fantastic job dear... :)

  • 11 years ago

    by ilgrl

    Yes I believe they do to.. I wrote this poem for my grandma who passed away in 2008..

  • 11 years ago

    by lillie

    The poem reminds me of my friend who passed away. Stay strong they watch over us. I miss her everyday

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