That's an amazing piece. Truly, well-done.

Expressive.
5/5

As beyond creative as this piece is. I think it holds a deeper meaning. I almost feel a feeling of sadness and emptiness. Like the person is wondering whether someone ever bothered to penetrate them deeper than their pelvis. Like almost a longing to be love, to be known and figured out and discovered. Too bad explicit can't go on the front page. All the ways this can be interpreted makes it a winner right there. Amazing imagination and amazing metaphor miss.

I feel almost intrusive to comment on this poem.

Not because of the subject matter, not because I am squeamish, but because you juxtapose the sexual act of penetration with the true knowing of another person.

What makes it even more disturbing, personally, is the analogy is made by use of a device which in itself prevents true connection from occurring.

Irony is heaven sent when the result is to probe our expectations and cast them in new positions that thwart our blithe acceptance of the world. Your poem does just that.

You're truly brilliant.

D**KINSON

EMILY F**KIN D**KINSON

I want to praise your comments, Jordan. They're spot on.

This is a masterpiece. I feel there is a parallel between the suppression of women in the modern age and the condom as it lies there on the floor, used and to be forgotten.

Ahahaha I wanna praise his comments too, but I know I'd be hunted.

Oh ABBY ABBY GIRL, although the word condom makes me feel sick, since I have quite a very good imagination, and I start see...well things Lol, but emmm hats off!

I knew however it would lead to something deff. deeper, than the obvious meaning.

It's what I do, using titles, and I was correct. So hats off for me as well. I love the way you word things, that's just for one. Also I love your tone and the way you really keep things neat without extras, I have not found one useless expression.

Usually poets when writing about sensitive topics they would try add more beauty to the structure with related phrases but not really functional, what I loved about this one, that it's all one part, you don't have lines that you could let go off. Just one piece wrapped up all together, in a very unique sick :P brilliant way.

the metaphor and the references, it was somehow strong enoughh to make you feel the disappointement or whatever feeling that's supposed to be reflected through the character in your piece. I can't express well how it made me feel, but you definitely know better since you wrote it.

It is a successsful poem that's for sure.
I love you. Keep writing, keep thinking.

I adore Yaki's interpretation.

Such a fabulous piece that holds so much meaning than the loathsome feeling I got because of the stickiness of semen :/

AMAZINGLY done!

I lovedddddddddd it.

I also loved it. Physically.

Er.

This is soo great!!! I absolutely love the last line. Well done.

Only one!

We would be Quick Caramel
and Lush Lips

Oh yeah, I inspired this piece of art.