Flashlight

Ah! Double posts. I'm so sorry!

I love this poem. It's incredibly relatable for many people. It could be about a lover, parent, friend, outsider of any kind. Either way, we feel at some point, there is always that person who never fails to make you feel like total crap about yourself.

"You make me see my failures and you
keep account of my many mistakes. "

^ This makes me want to swoop in and save the speaker. It elicits a sympathetic feeling, and it's such a hurtful two lines.

Gorgeous write!

Thank you:)

Nice metaphor and similes you gave over here. The use of light and darkness is appropriate in my opinion. Some tenses have to be rechecked like "have awaken" and "has allow" which I think should be "have awakened" and "has allowed". I loved your in writing your thoughts in a nice simple flow, it's attractive.
Great piece.

"Why do you persist on flashing your
lights upon my weakness? Yes your piercing
eyes have awaken my broken conscience."

^^^
I think these are one of your most powerful lines because there is a source of hurt here. And no ones like to have our weaknesses revealed or poked at.

"You have examined me and found
every defect, you have kept accurate
record to remind me that I could be voided
like a bad check."

^^^
This started off strong but the use of "like a bad check" made the stanza sound less serious. It made the meaning less deep if I may say.

"Yes your eyes have condemned and
because of my sins your self-righteousness
has allow you to throw me away."

^^^
Another strong line. People always trying to find a reason to do something horrible but still feel okay about it because they live by certain rules.

:] Thanks for sharing xxx