Self talks

Dont think about it...Dont make up stories in your head.
Stop daydreaming...Stop visualizing yourself in his arms."

- great opening because we have all had this little day dream about someone or something and so we can instantly realte to this, we have an idea of what the poem is going to be about and the emotion you are feeling because you are obviously missing this person. Also like how it is aimed at yourself like you cannot force yourself to get them out of your head, no matter how hard you try.

You remind me of a draft that comes under the crack of
a door when its closed. I try to remain shut, unreachable,
but there is always room for you to squeeze through the
archways around my heart. Your breeze unfathomable.

- fantastic comparison of the draft under the door, I think this is a brilliant metaphor because it so uncomfortable to feel and your description here was very clear.

I don't know why I've allowed my thoughts to drive in your
direction, but they don't seem to know any other way to travel.
Everywhere I go I see you and I feel foolish allowing them to
go places they've never been, but stopping them is impossible.

- I like the way your thoughts take you to places you have never been, we not only think of past memories but we think of the future meories that could have been, we put ourselves through this torture and pain even though we know it will come to nothing

You're some kind of vacation spot, safe haven, heaven, in my
mind and it torments me. Why you? What power do you hold
that no other has held over me? It couldn't be your infectious
smile or the beautiful heart that keeps you alive every day.

Could it?

- Love this could it being singled out, very powerful. I like the way you explainn how it feels to think of them, how safe it feels and peaceful, like a child imagining a fantasy world of fairies and unicorns, it leaves you in a place of peace within yourself and you forget for a moment what life is really like.

"Don't think about it...Dont make up stories in your head.
Stop daydreaming...Stop visualizing yourself in his arms."

- I love repetition in poetry, i think when used correctly it works so well and emphasises the most important messgae of the poem, and for this one it is here, it is that no matter how much you want to move on, your mind stays there with him.

I repeat myself daily. All day. Every day. Constantly.
Although if I'm to be honest, I quite enjoy the trance
your image leaves me in. I'm just afraid I'll get too
comfortable in my fantasy world, that I'll be saddened

when I recognize I'm living in reality, without you.

- great way to end, you would rather waste your day dreaming and feeling the good feelings than face reality that he is not with you. Such a heartbreaking thing to go trhough but we have to eventually let go, and the process is very painful.

Great job!! xx

Ah you said "safe haven" and I'm like, did you write this after reading Nicholas Sparks?! Still haven't read that book yet but remember you talked about it I'm pretty sure. Sorry, first thing that popped in my mind after reading lol....I love the idea of this poem, everything in it. I like how you began with the lines you are constantly repeating to yourself, trying to make it convincing that you don't need to imagine him so often, as nice and comforting as it may be. Really great run through of thoughts here between the mind and maybe a desire to not have reality that close. It was interesting how you said also you're afraid of the fantasy world too, as if believing too much in it will destroy some part of you. And that reminded me of Inception....losing the sense of reality can in the end disappoint though we all dream of the day when we met someone, or when we know it's real, lasting love.

How you started this poem was so samart, how you talk ro yourself to wake yourself up, maybe because that thing wont happen. And I loved it when you repeated the opening stanza. Love it, great job^_^