Skinless ( skeleton part 2)

by The Poet Behind The Poems   Feb 25, 2013


It happens all over the world yet
we tend to distance our selfs,
what if it's your body, your mind?.
try and imagine the unimaginable.

If I had a window, I would glare at the silver sun, making wishes upon its
children.Darkness has become my
sanctuary for in light I only see,
a monster.

I can still feel volcanic water tearing
Into my purified flesh, even the sound
of taps pouring brings fear knocking at my door.

My door opens,the smell of whiskey over powers my unclean body at
least this week,
I wasn't forgotten.

I introduce my eyes to daylight searching for left over food,unrecognisable eyes eclipse mine, scars remain deeply hidden.

footsteps past the window waiting for sound waves to strike
waiting ears,but there will be nothing.

With a blade in my hand , I
undressed them from
head to toe,They
will spend all
eternity as
a skeleton.

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  • 10 years ago

    by Marcy Lewis

    My gosh. This is so eery, and so disturbing. I love poetry with sequels.

    ...It feels like raw, fleshly wound with salt burning into it. Such a painful write.

    But good, nonetheless.

  • 11 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    Part 2 is even better....it describes so much of the story and makes it more clearer of what is going on. It adds more eeriness, more emotion, more power.

    Adore "silver sun" and "volcanic water" ...great word plays.

  • 11 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Ok Tony here I am to read all that youve requested. :)

    So I only had one problem with this piece. A LOT of the punctuation needs changed. There needs to be periods where there are commas and a couple places could use a semi colun. I can PM you an example if you want, but perhaps thats just my preference. I just think to change a little bit of punctuation would make this piece a little easier to read.

    The story line was deep and somewhat creepy. I really liked the use of silver sun to describe the moon, that was a nice play on words, to describe you live only in darkness.

    This read as someones thoughts rather than poetic and I think that helped the feel of this poem a lot.

    Nice write.

  • 11 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    AHA, Here it is...wow Tony...This is deep, this has that eeriness about it that I felt lacked in the first part...while it told a story I needed to know more and now I can see this pain...its raw and it touched me.

    I love your wording as well, it was smooth and everything I read I could see, amazing imagery and that just made the whole poem feel all the more intense

    Great write...:)

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