A shadow in the wind

Good poem well done :)

I adore the first stanza, using nature to set the scene... the decayed gravel gives it a hint of darkness in this piece.

From what I read, this is a piece about technology taking over... replacing the past and evolving into bigger things. Changing the world into a technology dependent universe...which of course, is true.

Nice ending!

What an interesting topic....Honestly I don't find this to be dark or side, I'd almost place it in the "life" section.

I agree with Saffie this seemed different from your normal style and I actually really liked it. You usually write deep, twisted wording poetry, this was very simple, a short poem about technology taking over the future...interesting to say the least.

:)

I loved the various elements you have in this piece, its not particulary a dark piece its actually a combination of many more. Its simple but also deep inits meaning. I loved the message you delievered in it!

Well done :)

xxx

I like this one very much and in particular last stanza.