Tattooed Skylines (Collab)

by Rusheena & Masked metaphor   Apr 8, 2013


Our stories are forever etched in time,
like a tattoo's unique design.
The ink of our thoughts
spill onto an infinite scroll,
and as words decorate the page,
they spell out boundless destinies
waiting to be fulfilled.
God created us all in one form,
yet He gave us the needle,
like an artist endorsing his protege.
We are God's artistic design,
forever modifying and extending,
hung for him like a portrait
with its message unending.
Engraved roads pave
the way for our dreams,
like entwined vines,
as we watch our journeys illuminate
under the tattooed skylines.

*This was for Baby Rainbow's collab challenge.*

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  • 9 years ago

    by Lune de ma vie

    Our stories are forever etched in time,
    like a tattoo's unique design.
    The ink of our thoughts
    spill onto an infinite scroll,
    and as words decorate the page,
    they spell out boundless destinies
    waiting to be fulfilled.

    ^
    Wow awesome opening. I love the metaphor of the ink on the page being like a tattoo which is etched in time. Reminds me of something from a long time a go something ancient.. The powerful choice of words show the connection between you two and the writing ability, the chemistry is truly there and etched in this first stanza so strongly. Also as you go deeper I feel like the message which is being inked out on the scroll is for someone which you are connected to in such devotion and beauty.

    God created us all in one form,
    yet He gave us the needle,
    like an artist endorsing his protege.
    We are God's artistic design,
    forever modifying and extending,
    hung for him like a portrait
    with its message unending.
    Engraved roads pave
    the way for our dreams,
    like entwined vines,
    as we watch our journeys illuminate
    under the tattooed skylines.

    Oh my gosh. Wow totally blown away by this. That is such a beautiful and deeply vivid way at looking at what we are to God. Such awesome writing here with so much creative flow.. Love it.. Kind of like God is a tattoo artist designing us with our own free will and journey and the tattoo isn't finished until our life is over. Awesome, beautiful write.

    5/5 to you both.

  • 9 years ago

    by BlueJay

    I really like this piece, it has an interesting voice created from pieces of both of you and the flow is remarkable considering its a collab. I really enjoyed this piece and I don't think you could have written this story any better. Nicely written.

  • 11 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    I voted for this poem, as well! I'm so glad it won, it's so unique and definitely can't tell it was a collab at all! You two meshed perfectly.

    Fantastic piece! :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    I loved the story within this piece...and like I said in the winners thread, I voted for this piece because of it's flow and the whole marrying of both of you, how this piece wasn't broken with the different styles, it complements each other and fits really well, I couldn't tell who wrote what, and if I hadn't of known it was a collab, I probably wouldn't have been able to tell.

    Well done both of you of the win, much deserved...really well penned guys :)
    xx

    • 11 years ago

      by Rusheena

      Thanks, Tara! We mixed and matched a lot, so I'm glad that it came off that way :]