Redemption

Well written

Well, write was a play on words and I am mad seemed most fitting at the time due to the double meaning. I've been trying to work with my rhythm a bit which is probably why it was a little choppy at parts. I appreciate the input a lot and the soul thing was exactly what i was going for. Thanks a lot.

Such conviction in this piece, I enjoyed reading!

I liked how mostly every line was a statement that could be read by itself, and held just as much strength as the next.

"Poetry is inception."
- I liked the idea of this... actually looked up the word online to see it's definition and inception means the process of beginning, which works well with poetry. It made me think we're beginning a new journey, a new revelation of ourselves.

"Do it write."
- Shouldn't "write" be "right"?

"Take up arms.
I am mad.
This life is not a fad.
Not a passing trend."
- I felt this was not smooth enough of a transition and that the rhyming was almost choppy. I didn't think the "I am mad" worked well, maybe too obvious and you could say it a more unique way?

"I won't live through the motions."
- Yes! Powerful line here. It reminded me of Matthew West's song "The Motions".... we all get caught up in the motions, we don't give everything we have at that moment.

"My existence will not be uprooted."
-Strong verb here, I liked the placement of "uprooted".

What I also liked about this piece, and perhaps your style if you do this in other poems, was how you rhymed, but not in the same spots. It wasn't predictable when you will and even though you rhymed at the ends of lines, it didn't seem cliche in my mind.

Good ending, speaks of the future, of the concept of "living well", which made me think of your well-being. How living well goes beyond physical barriers, but what's in the soul.

Keep writing.