Why

by Misundertood   Mar 31, 2014


Why must it be
that it can't be
just you and me

you asked me once
and i answered you
to this day my answers true
you asked

would you take my pain?
would always be there?
would i be you cane
to lean on ?
would i always care?

then you turn your
back on me
nothing left
i could not dream

then i ask
deep in my self
why ?

Why should i live in pain?
why should i be there?
why should i be your cane?
I'm done being your pawn
why should i care?

you left me there
on the shelf that is bare
so answer me
Why should i care?

J.out

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  • 10 years ago

    by Smaccams

    Crosscheck the flow on this one! And I guess a one or two spelling mistakes; I think you meant 'cane' rather than 'cain'?

    Otherwise - great read, and great conveyance. It's easy to feel the sadness of how they must be feeling on their current relationship or struggles. The title suits it well!

  • 10 years ago

    by Aanika Is Immortal

    I could relate to every word...and that's true when you know there's nothing left,your emotions efforts are not being valued then it's time that we step back let go of such things that gives nothing more then pain,and start living life for oneself... :)

  • 10 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    While I loved the message of the poem and the title, there are a lot of things you can fix. The rhyming was hard to read because it seems like you rhymed just to rhyme not to flow with the poem. I think you could pause the poem too with puncuation. Maybe you could try a non rhymimg poem? The rhyming here does not flow well but it's hard to rhyme. Maybe even try a poem with a rhyme scheme of abcb as in only the second and last line of each stanza rhymes that way it adds more flow and make it easier to read. Though this is a feeling poem as well. Add puncuation like periods at the end of each stanza to know where it ends and the next one begins. Like you add question marks after each question and I don't think you need to. You could rework the sentences to flow with commas. But that's just my advice. :). Hope it helped.

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