Hello,

It a very good imagination, with jelly,
One think I don't like jelly even I hate jelly, its taste, eheee.

But poem is really perfect.

Very interesting.

My mouth was a planet
Much like earth

The spoon was the shuttle
And my lips the atmosphere

These metaphors are just amazing & so unique.

Refreshing piece.

all the best & take care

This is cute and funny.
I like jelly very much

Cute poem with lots of meanings, seem deep, some just sweet and funny. I don't really like jelly but might look at it differently after reading this. LOL Was fun to read and I do get the messages, intended or not intended they are there.

This is really brilliant lucero. There are so many things you can say about this poem. I think very little punctuation works here because it lets the story flow more smoothly and you wrote it that way. You I believe wanted to write this poem with each scene go with the last. For example you go from placing the jelly onto the spoon to going into details about your mouth. The metaphor about the planet or landing safely was an interesting one. The feeling is hunger of course and the last two lines are great to stand out on their own. They are the most simple but are needed because they wrap up the poem and answer the plot of the poem. Well done.