Picture Perfect

This metaphoric, love/relationship poem is beautiful by Chelsey this week!
The metaphor of paintings, sculpting and creativity is just wonderful! I can't say enough about this poem.. The feelings are mixed and matched, intertwined and it's very colorful. The visual display is very exciting as well. I can see a couple painting together, forming a friendship and turning into love by the end. It's also an inspirational poem about the budding of a relationship in my opinion. Very classy and detailed! Well done!

I luv those lines as quoted by U
We can't expect him to understand, her to comprehend,
or them to agree because love does not merely exist. It
wasn't always present, nor visible to the naked eye, but
when it became available , my oh my...

We sure did invent something wonderful

I surely feel the same

Not bad, not bad at all!
Really, I loved the idea, most of the placement, the creation and arrangement of words.

A suggestion? Use more describing words. I did like the poem, but it didn't stick out to me in the sense that it didn't make me feel what you felt. And isn't that the point of poetry?
You are talented, but I felt something was amiss - I can't quite put a finger on it. Perhaps it was the lack of feeling I got from the poem. Or maybe a few extra adjectives would work.
But, with all due respect, it didn't sparkle to me.. It's missing that one thing that makes it shine.

Maybe you didn't really feel it as you should? Or maybe you should have explained it a different way?
I'm just musing.

However, although I did like it - the idea is great - I just felt there could have been more, something was amiss. Like a beautiful flower about to bloom, but it hasn't yet. It's still beautiful, but not at its best. Does that make sense?
I talk in metaphors sometimes. I apologizes.

But keep writing. It's the only way you'll grow. Like the flower.. See how I did that? ;). Ha.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex

Sweet....we invent love, what exists is just a mere visual of what we think of love. paint you love...let the world have that idea.

Some people think that love just simply is,
always has been, and will forever remain "existing";
Believing love is something we "search" for.
Not I. I believe love is something we "create" and
no ones masterpiece shall be discovered the same.

^ I really like this introduction. Honestly, it feels like it could have been a piece all on its own. Either way, it is beautiful and I love the way it leads into the next stanza. But before I move on to that next stanza let me also say I love the way you made "existing", "search", and "create" stand apart from the rest of the stanza, that kind of made it more clear as to where the rest of the piece was going.

I wish to pen every detail of you. Bind, laminate, and
hard cover the description-
you are my thesis.

^ I really like the feel of this stanza. It is simple but it says sooo much while also being that elegant kind of potent.

I have loved before, in many forms, but this journey
we sojourn has been nothing but a construction
site. Paving the way for growth on a daily basis.
I wasn't seeking love, but I watch it paint itself-
customized (to our needs.)

^ Your analogy here is definitely unique and a little "out there" but I really like the way you made that work so well here. The last two lines really speak to me though (I love them).

I've barely got my brush wet, I haven't even begun to
stroke the fabric, but every famous painting started
with a visual.

^ this stanza is amazing. Truly beautiful. Almost perfect, (should got in the first line be gotten?)

And my image of this creative love will splash off the canvas-
For you.

^ Wonderful. I am sorry I cannot think of any other way to describe this though.

We can't expect him to understand, her to comprehend,
or them to agree because love does not merely exist. It
wasn't always present, nor visible to the naked eye, but
when it became available , my oh my...

^ This is a great way to pull your conclusion together. It sums everything up so magnificently and it shows the excellence and importance of this relationship and of each person in general.

We sure did invent something wonderful.

^ I don't think there could have been any better line to end this with.

I have not read your work in a while, but this is amazing and it reminded me what I've been missing. This piece is phenomenal. Great piece Chelsey.