Fragmented captivity

How very brave. No matter the "condition" as if under interrogation lights of old, you stripped down to the place others of us refuse to accept, refuse to go, or refuse to talk about. Such bravery to type in each word and so clearly paint a picture to haunt our dreams. I could feel the sterile, impersonal, and cold surroundings throughout as a backdrop to your human condition. Life.

Judging Comment:

What a read this had been for me. A dark thriller
where emotions are bundled and picked apart
by everyone and everything around the person. Its
like seeing, feeling and experiencing these events
from inside out.

A psychological read that made me feel like I
was watching a movie. I also liked how the author
used day, time and month and separated the
events. Breaking up the story yet building it up to
the climax. I must say this has been the longest
poem I've read and was so very well written.

Heart rendering write...excellent!

Holy frag, where have you been on this site?

Love your piece.It is unique!

Dynamic in every sense of the word. This poem is true to life in an intensely Stygian manner!

You brought to life this poem in such an authentic way, it's eerie; so sinister and hair-raising but at the same time bereaved in what seems to be a heartbreaking tail of murder and confusion.

Reading this I could genuinely believe that this happened, as if I was watching a movie or a fact based show about a murder and mistaken identities.

I've been reading your poetry for quite awhile now and this has got to be the most disturbing, dark, chill to the bone, strike terror in the readers eyes poem I've ever read by you.

It's like this came to you by some sort of ghostly entity telling you a story beyond the grave. I'm not sure how you came up with such a telling tail but you really have struck a chord with my soul. I have not many words for this piece but I will try to elaborate on it rather then rambling on about how vividly realistic it seems.

I truly loved the metaphor "as questions unanswered,
paper Mache, layers of stories untold."
It really grasped me, basically to me it's saying that this person, this man has many identities (obviously).
But he is uncertain of who he is which identity is truly himself and as he lives and grows older more of the paper mache that falls off; his true self is revealed to the ones around him, even if he can't seem to grasp what truly lies within him.

The use of regression, backtracking upon the previous day helps the reader get a deeper sense of the emotions this guy is feeling. How he doesn't understand what happened and why he is confused upon the end results of his personality disorder. I enjoyed how you went from past to present because it helped me envision the story of the poetry in a sense that was more clear in understanding what extreme identity disorders can possibly consist of.

The battle within him to find himself is really telling throughout this entire poem. The love/hate relationship he is trying to balance is beautifully written; no way is it vague, you give so much detailed emotion within your words and stanzas it helps the reader really see the war ranging within his mind, body, and soul.

Repeating the first stanza toward the end ensured the lapse of judgement and fright that this man feels. He is scared to death and is unclear about what lies within him. As the people around him know there is a monster lying within him he is in the unknown trying to find himself and try to understand why all of this is happening. Perhaps an underlining issue transpired when he was a child which caused him to have these extreme spills of unknown identities.

I also loved how you used a real cemetery, truly gave this poem a sense of realism.. Is this real? Maybe I don't want to know honestly, but you have outdone yourself here. I think you should win the contest and channel your inner dark-side more often.

5/5