It can't be contagious if I have it already.

by Jonny212   Feb 19, 2015


It doesn't matter
No no no
It never will
Compared to you my efforts aren't enough
You pucker up, bat your eyes and my life gets tough
I wish I could tell you that I have had enough

Compared to you my significance is trifling
So why try hard
When I am obsolete
So why try hard and just accept defeat

The very thought of you
Makes me want to SCREAM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
You're made of glass
If I scream then I'll make you SHATTER!!!!!!!
My words form a spear and your narcissism splatters
Now's my chance
I seize the moment and climb up the ladder
Then I realize
That we are the same
That very narcissistic attitude runs in me

Then I see that you and I are not right or wrong
The thought courses through, but not forever long
I chew my pride
Spit it out
Then I move on
To the top
That desire is my double edge
I pass on pride, live the life and take the fame instead
Now here I am
Truly alone and my soul is dead
In the end
Its just me and you

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  • 9 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    The title actually drew me in; I like your tone in this and how honest, open, and bold it is. It's personal yet helps get emotions out I hope, and it makes the reader make a connection if there is someone in their life that is frustrating.

    "Compared you my efforts aren't enough"

    - Shouldn't it be "compared to you"?

    "Then I see that you and I are not right or wrong"

    - Very thought-provoking line. It makes me think, whatever relationship, that it's not all black and white. There are grays. Also makes me wonder if, even though we may claim we know right vs. wrong, some things can't be explained or are deeper past the surface... how we feel, react to others, etc.

    This person obviously held a lot of significance for you. That ending is haunting, like you thought it better to make your own choices and move on, yet your "soul is dead", and you still imagine being with this person in the end.

    A suggestion on the format of this poem: I'm not sure you necessarily need to put the "scream" and "shatter" in all caps with so many exclamation points. I personally never feel the need for exclamation points in my writings because you can make a point without it sometimes. Or without so many at least. Simply my opinion though.

    Usually I'm a stickler for punctuation too but I noticed with this poem, it is pretty easy to read without commas or periods in every line. I think that goes with an author's style, too.

    Emotions are strong in this; keep writing.

    • 9 years ago

      by Jonny212

      Thanks for that correction I really did not see that,and thank you for reading it. I also wrote this to the beat of a martyr defiled song and was singing the words as I wrote this.I put a ton of emphasis on "scream" and "shatter" because I was screaming these words as I wrote.