Transition

Nice job on your piece.Leaves the reader thinking of the sadness in your words.

But I am now one of them -
it is all that I can be
to ensure there is no damage done
to those who touch my heart.

^^^Â¥^Â¥

Your last stanza contains the most heartache.

Take care Cindy

JUDGING COMMENT:

On reading this I gather this is something very
personal to the writer and at the same time it is a
write that some can relate to. The opening lines:

The air we breathe feeds poison into my lungs,
tainting my blood and cursing my heart.

Its an interesting one for without saying or isolating
it conveys about the very society we live in. The
gossips perhaps, their expectations and so forth
just consumes us and leaves us down hearted
even guilty.

Demons:
they watch from a distance
as they claim me into their evil spirits
and trap me out here forever,
as one of them!

^^The use of demons here can be the very
people who are turning our live sour and miserable;
so much so at one point or the other our hearts
too tend to bend and we become one of these
"demons". Maybe my interpretation is wrong but
that is how I see it here.

But I am now one of them -
it is all that I can be
to ensure there is no damage done
to those who touch my heart.

^^Such a saddening situation that without wanting
to and been tired of fighting we get into that world
so that in a way we can stop others becoming a
captive in this demonic world. Or we can save
the ones we love by pushing them away. Some
sacrifices are worth it and at the same time it
can never be understood by the others. Overall a
write that tugs at my heart.