Comments : On Summer Nights (Rondeau)

  • 5 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hellon,
    This is the reason I love poetry and this site: now and again I stumble across beautiful, skilled pieces like this. I think I said the same about a poem of yours called "The life cycle of a tree", but this really is a pure piece of poetry. Your words choice, descriptions and images created are beautiful. Just some of my favourite lines:
    "as twilight bathes a yawning sky"
    "Sweet jasmine breathes a perfumed sigh"
    "A crescent moon goes swinging by"
    Three lovely lines in a poem filled with them. I love your constant use of personification in this piece too.
    All the very best and take care,
    Ben.
    Nominated

  • 5 years ago

    by GB

    Nostalgic and full of mesmerizing imagery, it feels like every word is dancing, your poetry always a joy to read :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Dancing Rivers

    This actually made me happy cry :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Acoustic Odyssey

    Simply beautiful! I agree wholeheartedly with GB, I'm stuffed to the brim with nostalgia after reading this. Incredibly soothing, thanks for this!

  • 5 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello Hellon,

    reading this is like having a creative writing lesson. 'Ah, I see that is how it is done!'

    Thank you my dear for showing me and undoubtedly how 'it' is done!

    Please don't stop though, keep showing us how and I/ will try and learn.

    Take care,

    Michael

  • 5 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    This is really lovely, Hellon.

    I love the Rondeau format, it lends itself perfectly for a romantic verse.

    Well done,

    Ingrid

  • 5 years ago

    by Cindy

    Like always a excellent write.
    Take care Cindy

  • 5 years ago

    by yogi73

    Such a placid and well written poem. I love your metaphors; from the yawning sky to the wise owl. This is a serene nature poem that draws one into vivid summer nights.

  • 5 years ago

    by Everlasting

    I remember this one. It's a beauty.

    • 5 years ago

      by Hellon

      Thank you all so much...I've been gone for a few days and now just getting time to catch up and, I'm overwhelmed by the response to this poem...ta much!

  • 5 years ago

    by debbylyn

    I always love a beautifully rhymed piece of poetry and this is most excellent!

  • 5 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Congratulations Hellon - a more deserving win, there never was.
    All the very best
    Ben

  • 5 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    Congrats on the win, well deserved!! :)

    • 5 years ago

      by Hellon

      Thank you Ingrid and Ben...I appreciate your words.

  • 5 years ago

    by Sarwar Ferrarri

    Its Just Awesome

  • 5 years ago

    by Rania Moallem

    Very vivid and descriptive. Perhaps one of the most captivating poems for this week, put alone the theme itself, the write successfully reflected nature in a very charming way and implemented such role in her usage of words like

    "Sweet jasmine breathes a perfumed sigh"
    "yawning sky" "wise owl"

    A very refreshing piece of art.

    The rhyme and flow just added bonus beauty to the poem, for the wording itself having no rhyme at all would just have been as beautiful. A very well penned poem.

    And I have to say, this is utterly romantic.

  • 4 years ago

    by Em

    You paint such scenery in this piece and it's beautiful. I imagine being there.

    You have a way with words.
    Take care, Em