Haiku/Senryu, April '16

Judges comments

Nightingales nuance
morning melodies for those
who cannot listen.

Nuance is one of those words I have read a million times and convinced myself that I know what it means. For once I actually looked it up and this is its definition;

a subtle difference in or shade of meaning, expression, or sound.

Reading this definition and reading it after Nightingales has just created a whole scene in my mind, using 2 words. Which is what a Haiku/Senryu is all about.
However.....
Night-in-ga-les nu-ance is 6 syllables.
Unless you pronounce Gales as 1 syllable.
Now when I am unsure I use wordcalc syllable counter who agree with me that it is 4.
Because of this, I drop from 7 to 4 points.
I also researched the Haiku form (again) which is 5/7/5 but more importantly 17 syllables.

Now onto why I chose this as one of my top 3.
The final line.
The turn is the meat of any Haiku, this turn is a mind explosion.
Very clever writing.
I also like the choice the author gives us, A nature poem (haiku) or a sad indictment of life? (senryu)
Or write it twice?! 4 points

Brainy one

congratulations ...

Nice

Lovely Haiku! Congratulations on your win!

Congratulations - it's always nice to see these short forms winning the weekly contests.

Take care,

Michael