Haiku/Senryu, April '16

by Colm   Apr 29, 2016

Nightingales nuance
morning melodies for those
who cannot listen.


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  • 6 years ago

    by Darren

    Judges comments

    Nightingales nuance
    morning melodies for those
    who cannot listen.

    Nuance is one of those words I have read a million times and convinced myself that I know what it means. For once I actually looked it up and this is its definition;

    a subtle difference in or shade of meaning, expression, or sound.

    Reading this definition and reading it after Nightingales has just created a whole scene in my mind, using 2 words. Which is what a Haiku/Senryu is all about.
    Night-in-ga-les nu-ance is 6 syllables.
    Unless you pronounce Gales as 1 syllable.
    Now when I am unsure I use wordcalc syllable counter who agree with me that it is 4.
    Because of this, I drop from 7 to 4 points.
    I also researched the Haiku form (again) which is 5/7/5 but more importantly 17 syllables.

    Now onto why I chose this as one of my top 3.
    The final line.
    The turn is the meat of any Haiku, this turn is a mind explosion.
    Very clever writing.
    I also like the choice the author gives us, A nature poem (haiku) or a sad indictment of life? (senryu)
    Or write it twice?! 4 points

  • 6 years ago

    by Lyn Aribaca

    Brainy one

    congratulations ...

  • 6 years ago

    by Louis A Ranero


  • 6 years ago

    by Brenda

    Lovely Haiku! Congratulations on your win!

  • 6 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Congratulations - it's always nice to see these short forms winning the weekly contests.

    Take care,