Such a great tribute to your sister. I cant imagine what its like losing a sibling like this :( Sorry for your loss.
5 years ago
Michael, I am in pieces. This is as Brenda said so beautiful yet so very sad. I'm sorry for your loss whether it's recent or not as I could never comprehend losing any of my siblings. I lost one but he was older than me and only a month old because he was very ill so I can't really grieve for him but I often wonder how my life would have mapped out if he were here as he'd have needed a lot of help. (he stopped growing in the womb at 24 weeks)
I believe there is no greater pain than losing any family member because it takes away a little piece of your heart, I feel.
Again, you have used such wonderful imagery to describe your sisters eyes and smile and she seemed to brighten up the room (to me) when she walked in, this is how I see her portrayed and if she's anything like you, then I reckon she'd be a little bit cheeky too.
All in all a very emotion filled piece which I will be nominating as soon as I can but before that I hope someone who can nominate does.
Hugs and best wishes, Em
5 years ago
by Ben Pickard
I will not comment on this other than to say it placed a terrible lump firmly in my throat and moved me immensely.
It is a brilliant piece of descriptive writing (the kind I wish you'd write more of, sometimes) and the emotion drips from every word.
I will nominate this later and I genuinely hope this makes the front page next week.
Mind you, sometimes a piece of writing transcends even that on this site - this is one. Beautiful.
This is a heart-wrenching poem! This is just beautiful and sad. The descriptive methods you used here are really great. I was so absorbed by this poem! The structure, the lay-out, the word usage, and the narrative are all well-portrayed.
Losing someone dear to us is really tragic. Hope you're well. Take care.
I've wanted to comment on this since it was first posted but found it very hard to do so. I lost my brother way too young in life so I can relate to your words very well...his birthday was over the last weekend and, although he's been gone a long time now, like you I still remember so many little things about him that keeps him alive to this day in my mind.
Michael, your sister is looking down and watching over you. Such sweet words and a great tribute to her. I've lost my sister at age of 57 due to cancer while I was awaiting surgery. Never had a chance to say good bye. She may be gone but her spirit often visits me. Hope you are ok and all the very best. Hugs