Comments : Jacqueline

  • 5 years ago

    by Brenda

    Michael, I am torn apart! God, this is so incredibly beautiful, incredibly sad. I am so sorry for your loss. Just beautiful, you honored your sister. Hugs-

  • 5 years ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Such a great tribute to your sister. I cant imagine what its like losing a sibling like this :( Sorry for your loss.

  • 5 years ago

    by Em

    Michael, I am in pieces. This is as Brenda said so beautiful yet so very sad. I'm sorry for your loss whether it's recent or not as I could never comprehend losing any of my siblings. I lost one but he was older than me and only a month old because he was very ill so I can't really grieve for him but I often wonder how my life would have mapped out if he were here as he'd have needed a lot of help. (he stopped growing in the womb at 24 weeks)
    I believe there is no greater pain than losing any family member because it takes away a little piece of your heart, I feel.
    Again, you have used such wonderful imagery to describe your sisters eyes and smile and she seemed to brighten up the room (to me) when she walked in, this is how I see her portrayed and if she's anything like you, then I reckon she'd be a little bit cheeky too.

    All in all a very emotion filled piece which I will be nominating as soon as I can but before that I hope someone who can nominate does.

    Hugs and best wishes, Em

  • 5 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Michael,

    I will not comment on this other than to say it placed a terrible lump firmly in my throat and moved me immensely.
    It is a brilliant piece of descriptive writing (the kind I wish you'd write more of, sometimes) and the emotion drips from every word.

    I will nominate this later and I genuinely hope this makes the front page next week.
    Mind you, sometimes a piece of writing transcends even that on this site - this is one. Beautiful.

    Take care,

    SL

  • 5 years ago

    by Mahal Ko Kuya Ko

    This is a heart-wrenching poem! This is just beautiful and sad. The descriptive methods you used here are really great. I was so absorbed by this poem! The structure, the lay-out, the word usage, and the narrative are all well-portrayed.

    Losing someone dear to us is really tragic. Hope you're well. Take care.

    --- MKKK

  • 5 years ago

    by Hellon

    I've wanted to comment on this since it was first posted but found it very hard to do so. I lost my brother way too young in life so I can relate to your words very well...his birthday was over the last weekend and, although he's been gone a long time now, like you I still remember so many little things about him that keeps him alive to this day in my mind.

  • 5 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Michael, your sister is looking down and watching over you. Such sweet words and a great tribute to her. I've lost my sister at age of 57 due to cancer while I was awaiting surgery. Never had a chance to say good bye. She may be gone but her spirit often visits me. Hope you are ok and all the very best. Hugs

    • 5 years ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      Thank you for your lovely comments.

  • 5 years ago

    by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

    A a aah. :( a heartfelt poem. .. The pain, logging, and loneliness everything inject to this piece. well done

  • 5 years ago

    by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

    A a aah. :( a heartfelt poem. .. The pain, longing, and loneliness everything inject to this piece. well done...hope u r OK now

  • 5 years ago

    by Everlasting

    I remember now why I keep my distance from the sad category... touching piece. keep on writing. You do it so well.

    The visual, the sadness, the make you think kind of piece. The injection of longing and the act of remembering a dear one makes this piece too real that I feel it.

    All the best always

  • 5 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Michael - a thoroughly deserved win and a massive congratulations from me.

    Take care.

  • 5 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    Great poem, Michael, so glad to see this won!

    A beautiful tribute with such deep emotions!

    Well done,

    (((hugs))) xx Ingrid

  • 5 years ago

    by Em

    So glad to see this on the front page Michael. Well done.

  • 5 years ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Well done on the win!

  • 5 years ago

    by Keke Williams

    I have no words. I'm simply blown away. Beautiful, real, and sad

    • 5 years ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      Thank you - sometimes words are not enough. We as writers try to say what cannot be...

  • 5 years ago

    by courtney

    A wonderful piece sorry for your loss

  • 5 years ago

    by Ezeani Sunday

    The words are just flowing calmly into my ears. Great

  • 4 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Judging Comment

    This poem is beyond emotional and when I read this the first time, I cried. The elegant way Michael wrote this very personal poem, led me to the end, feeling love and sorrow all at the same time.

    The eyes and smiles are detailed throughout and I could feel the strength and vibrant message throughout!

  • 4 years ago

    by Phil

    This had me in tears Mr Darcy. just wow, I couldn't imagine losing my dear sister