Our Truth

A wonderfully dark, and vulnerable piece, full of struggle. The line "The reasons I have said before have always fallen on deaf ears." I found to be particularly intriguing and strong, as with the heartbreaking last line of "Some days I am just broken and there's nothing you can do.".

Personally, I felt that the first four lines were just a touch too lengthy, and so for me it was difficult to settle into the rhythm. The six lines afterwards, were much more edible, and thus came across stronger, in my opinion.

However, this is a strongly written piece bursting with powerful but caged emotion, as if a body were squeezed into a shirt that was far too many sizes too short, and the buttons are on the brink of failure.

Tasha,
People are irritating like that, aren't they? 'Speak to me' 'tell me what's wrong' 'how are you feeling'. These are just some of the promising ways they start the conversation. Funny, though, they never look so enthusiastic when you give them the honesty you thought they wanted...

Great write.

Ben