Comments : Dancing by knife point

  • 2 years ago

    by Em

    I'll just leave this here... Yes, yes, yes. I can so relate to this though could not have written this anywhere near as good as you have. I love the pauses in my opinion the effect (or is that affect) they have is very important.

    Take care
    Em x

  • 2 years ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    Yep, insomnia's a bugger eh! You've captured its torment really well :-) x
    =^.^=

  • 2 years ago

    by Brenda

    Amen Michael, amen... Well stated. Insomnia is awful, vicious cycle the next day struggling to stay awake only to go to bed the next night wide awake.

  • 2 years ago

    by Michael

    Mr D
    A wonderful acrostic, no doubt kept you up all night :)

    Michael

  • 2 years ago

    by CJ Maleney

    I really like this dude and the acrostic is killer,

    Insomnia is a thing that is best described with an F word. If I can get to sleep it's not so bad, unfortunately that is the problem. Once asleep I'm out of it. I may wake sometimes but not so often of late. However I rarely get to sleep before 1 or 2 in the morning and when you have to rise at 6am you are a wreck for the entire day.

    I pity those who go through the entire night, I've been there and it's not funny.

    Craig

  • 2 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    An excellent Artistic and well deserved nomination. Milly x

  • 2 years ago

    by Risqué

    This paints a very vivid picture in my head, and I relate to it so very well.
    I enjoyed this piece, thank you.

  • 2 years ago

    by Mark

    Amazing acrostic. Such a poetic way of describing the struggle and movement of an insomniac. Magnificent vocabulary.

  • 2 years ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    i did mean to come back and comment on this..
    Sorry!!!!

    Insomnia is a Bitc.. with a capital B!!!!

    I loved this Mr D... Nominated

  • 2 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    Oh wow...loved this Mr. Darcy. Insomniac here.

  • 2 years ago

    by Hellon

    Ok....my thoughts *cough* :)
    ___________

    In between elastic ticks,

    Night time contort this bed. (contorts?)

    Smoldering its wicked wick, ..I was disappointed that you used the american spelling for smouldering.

    On endless razor thread. . .

    Manic curls a thining smile, (thinning)

    Night's where he likes to dance;

    It's death by breath, so salty vile. . .

    Awake, I weep, upon his Lance.

    I'm not sure if these 'errors' were a deliberate ploy on your part to tie in with in the insomnia subject or whether the site self corrected the spelling but...I just found it weird coming from you my friend. Still, I did enjoy the poem...

    • 2 years ago

      by - Mr. Darcy

      lol - thank you Hellon. I did write this bleary eyed, but the mistake should have been picked up before now. I will amend them, including the American spellings. I guess this is the trouble when I write directly onto the PnQ page.

      Thank you, friend, for you, ever insightful comment. Praise to you!

  • 2 years ago

    by Mark

    Congratulations Mr Darcy!

  • 2 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Michael, it is lovely to see you back up on the front page of PnQ - you have returned with two marvellous pieces of poetry.

    • 2 years ago

      by - Mr. Darcy

      Thanks guys. It's nice to be back, rubbing shoulders with such talented and handsome people.

  • 2 years ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    Congratulations Mr D! ;-) x
    =^.^=

  • 2 years ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Thank you, Kitty cat. ;0) x

  • 2 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Congrats on the win

  • 2 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    Congratulations on your win, Mr. Darcy!

  • 2 years ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Thank you, ladies. I am chuffed to bits!

  • 2 years ago

    by Michael

    Congratulations Mr D
    clever acrostic!

    Michael :)

  • 2 years ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Congrats Mr Darcy!!