The Broken

by TheDarkCloudBehindthePoet   Oct 18, 2017


Visions of the life we were suppose to have shatter like the memories of my first love,
from every sleepless night,
to every terrible thought that raced through our minds,
the only thing that kept us alive was our will too die,

The thought of death keeps us on our feet,
from cutting too deep,
to letting go of the wheel on some dark abandoned highway,
the tragedy is that it never happened,

Becoming broken is the path to being whole,
But after years of fallen tears and the scars we can't remove,
we transform into the people we were meant to be,

The kind of people who have been through the darkness but didn't let it consume them,
The kind of people who have been through so much that nothing scares them,
The kind of people who become leaders and help those going through the same trials,

We evolve because we have too,
We evolve because we never gave up,
We evolve because death showed us the way..

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  • 6 years ago

    by BlueJay

    I have a problem where I do not know where to end long lines - especially since all my works start out as just blobs of text. I feel like that happened here also, not that it's a bad thing, just that it made it more difficult for me to focus on my first read through. I love the personality in this and all the other directions this idea could take on. However the repetition was plain old annoying! Consider rephrasing some lines - it'll give the piece more to make it unique and creative.

    • 6 years ago

      by TheDarkCloudBehindthePoet

      Thank you you 4 taking the time to read my poem and give me advice. I really appreciate that. I hated the repetitiveness at the end but I was rushing to finish it. I'm definitely going to do some rephrasing because I really loved this piece. Thank you again Blue Jay!