Wow, I have to say, I'm pretty floored by this piece. The ONLY thing I'd recommend possibly is to put the listen closely after a colon or followed by an ellipse. Because that would emphasise the ending just a tad without distracting from the stunning structure of the piece.
Otherwise I love the simplicity to this which paired so well with the voice in this. There was a little bit of mystery, a ton of courage and a beautiful sense of ambiguity that allows each and every audience member to make something different and even more stunning out of this piece.
"I often think before I write something if - somewhere, somehow - the words are already there and already structured. The idea that they can be pulled from the air and made into something beautiful is an idea that's always fascinated me. Perhaps if we stare at a page long enough or 'listen closely' we may just be able to find meaning before anything has even been written. Anyway, this poem made me think and so it receives my seven." (7)