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  • 1 year ago

    by Ben Pickard

    This is effectively oppressive, Star. I was almost panicking as I read down the page!

    I hope you are well.

    Ben

    • 1 year ago

      by Star

      Thank you!!

  • 1 year ago

    by Skyfire

    I LOVE the way you so intentionally used the semicolon here. It stands out so singularly to me and is the perfect transition to the last line.

    • 1 year ago

      by Star

      Thank you :)

  • 1 year ago

    by Rania Moallem

    <3

  • 1 year ago

    by Meena Krish

    This makes the mind to imagine a lot of things and
    makes the reader wander about the abyss...the writer
    is in...well penned!

    • 1 year ago

      by Star

      Thank you Meena :)

  • 1 year ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Falling into the darkness, hoping for another chance, where we can be on steady ground again, re-connected with life.... such meaning in so few lines!

    I felt uplifted in this, because I too, knows what it means to forget or not be able to remember what being alive means. Being so distant from it, yet realizing I can try again. The simple hope of another "breath" speaks volumes. Another shot at life, and how human it is to fall down, to lose sight of land, to feel like we can't keep holding on... and knowing we have to keep the hope that we can be offered an anchor, another start.

    LOVE THIS STAR!! :)

    • 1 year ago

      by Star

      You made me smile, thank you!!

  • 1 year ago

    by Everlasting

    The frustration. I have have dreams exactly like these words describe it. It’s scary.

    • 1 year ago

      by Star

      It is!!!
      Thanks Luce <3