firstly, thank you for your comment on my poem. :)
Secondly, your poem...
after the first read I noticed the rhyme scheme (aa,b,cc,b,dd,b,ee,b,ff,b, gg,b) I like a rhyme scheme that not often crops up. The verses are short but pleasing, the simile Thoughts racing like cars' was affective in describing how many feel about this pandemic. There are rules literally coming out of our ears! lol Still, this has, understandably, serious tones, too! Like, 'The sick are dying alone,Everyone must stay at home.' The poem, rightly so, continues to an incomplete end, just like where we are, a world not knowing how this is going to turn out.
Nice work - let's see where 2021 leads us...
6 months ago
by Ben Pickard
It is overwhelming and, in honesty, I fear much of this year will be the same as last but I do believe it will begin to get better in the latter months. Anyway, hang on until then.
This is excellent. It's a bad time for all of us, but we all must remember it's not just us - it's everyone.
The ryhming is smooth all the way through. The punctuation is perfect, though I think in this line
The fights not over, we must go on...
' fights' should have an apostrophe before the 's' , as it's a contraction of ' fight is'. I might be wrong :)
I love all of it, but the line
We're overworked and under paid.
Is my favourite.
It's relatable, well written and extremely good. I loved it :)