Wow-what a powerful piece from start to finish! I admire your ability to link everything together so seamlessly.
You have painted a beautiful and realistic portrait of this day, this event, and feelings buried underneath it all. I like the selection of words you have used to engage the reader and provide them with the key to the event you speak on. The longing of someone and then being hit with the realization that they may be into someone else. It is a hard pill to swallow. I love the detailed description of this piece too. You describe both people so vividly it is easy to imagine this event happening in my mind like a motion picture.