You Hate Me

by Kryptonite Dreamer   Dec 10, 2021


I get it,
You don't like me,
You don't like the writing style I have tried creating,
One letting everyone into a path of darkness,
"It's too scary",
"It's too dark",
But you are the one who told me for my writing,
To have a rhyme or reason,
But when I do as you say,
You see it as treason,
Holding me back to the past,
Holding me into the darkness,
Because darkness is comfort,
Since we paint amazing visuals with our words,
And I know what you'll tell me,
"It's not about how you write,
It's about the story you tell",
But when I try to write something positive,
You trash the idea,
You tell me its a dumb story,
You tell me I need to be a better writer,
You say you hate the style its going in,
"Too much positivity",
"Not enough reflecting",
"No real story for people to relate to",
So I get it,
You hate me
For me being me

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  • 2 years ago

    by Kate

    I like the repetition almost in the beginning and the end of the poem. Gives it more of an introduction and a proper closing. As for suggestions, I think punctuation can make a huge different in how some reads the poem. As does how you structure your sentences. Commas make it feel like an open flow but I think some lines wouldn’t work really well with other punctuation, like:

    “You trash the idea.
    You tell me it’s a dumb story.
    You tell me I need to be a better writer.”

    Even small changes like that, or even breaking up the lines entirely, really packs more of a punch, really drives home the hurt that is behind the words because of how we pause at a period rather than a comma. Overall, like the subject matter of the poems is nice, how you change yourself or your style for someone and it still doesn’t make them happy.

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