Infinity (Senryu)

by BOB GALLO   Jan 13, 2024


When I write something
I make sure that I'm written
with what I'm writing.

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  • 3 months ago

    by Everlasting

    I write writing about writing
    but writing what I write
    doesn’t write what i should be writing

    it’s odd

    i write to write
    and i will write to write
    because writing is not writing
    unless I write, right?

    oh well,

    As always thanks for the inspiration

    • 3 months ago

      by BOB GALLO

      In the first case It is chaotic. It doesn't really convey anything but a tongue twist that sometime seems entraps you and deludes you as a real thought. You should know that tongue twisting like this could be entrapped to some eventual meaning but it seem somehow showy to me.

      in second part: "i write to write
      and i will write to write" is changing tens in what already said. It is an obsession with tongue twisting rather than real meaning.
      and the :: "because writing is not writing
      unless I write, right?"
      it is stressing obvious because you get so carried away in similar sounding word (writing vs right)) that you replace a tongue twister with real thought.
      Still I think you are in a right track by experimenting bravely with imageries and words. but I think it is the time for you to realise the difference.

    • 3 months ago

      by Everlasting

      Nah, it does convey something but you have to pay close attention to it. It’s meant to be understood by few.

      But ultimately it only says that I have no control of what I write. I write writing about writing

      I simply write about writing and the writing writes itself out

      Tongue twisters are fun.

      Hope you have a great day.

    • 3 months ago

      by BOB GALLO

      reply to your reply::
      So, let analyze that and find out why I ain’t included to " a few" club.
      I write writing about writing
      the first writing is extra because whoever writes, s/he is exercises the act of writing. It is too obvious when you write you are producing writing. So, you are not saying anything, only enjoying the tongue twisting. You could simply say: I write, or, I am writing, about writing. Then it would mean you are writing about grammar, or the art of semantic, or rhetoric, or even engaging in philosophy of language, such as New Positivism.
      then: " but writing what I write
      doesn’t write what i should be writing"
      is just the sophistication that could be simple like: My writing is not what it should be, or to my real interest. You just enjoy the repetition of the word writing and prolong the sentence in order to fit more "writing" as long as it is grammatically sound, regardless of if it adds to the writing, and you go with it as long as grammatically possible. So, you are just playing. As a real friend I am obligated to tell you that don’t delude yourself of you are holding a secret message here that is only revealed to special ones.

      Yet the interesting thing that I've found in your make up is the insinuation of: When you write something, that writing has the mind of its own and might write something different to what I meant initially, something perhaps more profound. So this is kind of transcendental and shows me you're really corresponding to the initial Senryu. Something that speciality is your trade mark. That you grasp notions (sometimes) without registering them in the mind. You have potential of bodily understanding. And this is a phenomenon thing in Carlos Castaneda’s teaching of "Separate Reality" Which is separate because it is different and is not accessible to people that they are one dimensional and are only “mind” oriented.

      Note: I only talk to you this straight forward and a few personal friends in real world. I know it could be considered problematic for the most. It might sound off a little or provocative because I am talking to you mildly, yet in two dimensions.