by TrUtH hUrTs Oct 25, 2004
category :
Dark, fantasy /
dark, horror
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Amorphous shadows lay deathly still |
by Nici
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Again good use of descriptive language and in an educated way. |
by No Motiv?
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"ripped it’s flesh with mendacious lies |
by Leah20
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I really liked this poem. I generally don't like like poems about depression, but this was very original, I really enjoyed it, keep it up! |
by N J Thornton
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I really enjoyed the imagery and your vocab shines greatly in this poem. You created a dark picture of this torn butterfly which lives inside your soul. You combined the concept of beauty and pain well. The only problem for me was in the third stanza, the flow seemed to break up a little. Apart from that great work, keep it up. |
by Pianist
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You painted a vivid picture in my mind. Great job! I loved it |