Liar!

by *tanya*   Nov 24, 2004


I must be such a great actress, perhaps the best I know.
I can always seem to fool you, acting happy when I'm low.
"You're in a good mood tonight" Your words pierced my heart.
"Yeah, I guess I am" I replied with a fake smile that teared me apart.
You think you know me so well, but you don't notice the lies in my tone.
The fact that I can fool you makes me think I'm better off alone.
I bet you didn't know I cut myself tonight, once more.
I bet you didn't know I cried myself to sleep, like I did before.
The act is all for you, I want you to think I'm fine.
But surely someone can see through this made-up mask of mine?
I know if you knew I was hurting, then you would be too.
Thats why I must let you think I'm happy, even if its the last thing I do.
So I'll keep up this charade, however much I tire.
And when death finally reaches me, I'll die with you never knowing I was a LIAR!

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  • 19 years ago

    by Dieing

    This poem is great...its kinda odd you were able to say how much it hurts no more no less..I can relate to this poem alot and gave it a 5..keep up the great work!

  • 19 years ago

    by silent submission

    my god i love it so much! your a great writer, thanx for putting into words what i couldn't figure out for myself. keep it up your fantastic.

  • 19 years ago

    by *tanya*

    thanx guys :D

  • 19 years ago

    by Lorrie

    Meh, i didnt see anything wrong with it. i can totaly relate. thanx for the comment on mine. ur an awesome writter...keep it up. and i hope that u feel so good one day, u dont have to put on a show..becusae i do the same thing everyday!

  • 19 years ago

    by in the realm of Chaos

    You did a great job on the rhyming. It is excellent. Your message is clear to see and understand, but I think there is a hidden message in there. Correct me if I'm wrong.

    What I Didnt Like:
    1) your poem did not have a real flow. it was choppy sounding.
    2) how you transition from line to line is sometimes not too clear; makes your poem sound unorganized

    What I Liked:
    1) the title fits the poem
    2) the rhyming
    3) the tone

    I gave you a five. Let me know if you did any revisions on this. You are added to my favorites list. (fyi)

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