by Sean Allen Dec 8, 2004
category :
Life, society /
meaning of life
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Pink Tiki torch light: |
by Aken Sol
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Hmm.... I like it. Uh, might wanna check out your third stanza and the whole bit about sin. That line doesn't really flow right. Read it once over again and you'll notice how all the other lines have a longer ring to it. And damn, that's one crazy format u got there :-D |
by Lance Hardy
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You're a bit confusing to me sir. Heh. |
by FTS Miles
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That is a fantastic poem. A wicked and enjoyable ride. :) |