Demon in my Mind

by Jacklyn   Feb 24, 2005


I want you to cry,
I want you to die,
I no longer want you by my side,
Because you’re the hatred in my eyes,
The nightmares in my nights,
The scars in my life,
And the demon in my mind,
The pain within my heart,
The cuts upon my arms,
The war that’s deep inside,
The civil war within my mind,
Who will win, and who will die?
I choose you since you make me constantly
Fight for my life,
I slowly lose control,
As you slowly conquer my world,
Eliminating others,
Who where once my friends by my side,
You make me face you alone,
Which I hadn’t got the strength to fight,
An uneven match, the strong against the weak,
The odds are in your favor,
It’s you they say I can’t beat,
But I try and I try, I won’t give up without a fight,
It’s all up to you and how you change the rules,
You played with your words,
Made me waste energy on others,
But you were the enemy all along,
Which I have to face when I’m all alone,
You’re the demon that feeds my mind,
With the truth and the lies,
How will I survive?
When you’re the demon in my mind?

~, it's kind of based off the book Ender's Game and it seems like it may be unorganised but this is his thoughts and thoughts sometimes aren't organised.

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  • 19 years ago

    by Jacki

    I think it needs some touch ups here and there. The rhyme pattern is off. You start off rhyming and then it weakens.

    I think the line:
    I choose you since you make me constantlyFight for my life

    is good but misplaced. It was a good concept.

    I don't want to sound harsh because i'm not trying to at all. I"m just trying to tell you how I feel.

    I'd give it a 3 1/2only because I give 5's out that I think are perfect poems. I won't rate it because I won't drop your score.

    But I'll check out some of your other work :)

  • 19 years ago

    by Lost Girl

    Another amazing poem....close to my heart. xxxxx 5/5

  • 19 years ago

    by Bleeding_Red_Fallen_Angel

    Great poem. You can do it! Stay strong. >3jess

  • 19 years ago

    by ღ BRiANNA ღ

    Jackelyn ... ur rele nice lol ... and no its not true .... its actually about my frend .. her dad past away ... but thanx ne way ! =]

  • 19 years ago

    by ღ BRiANNA ღ

    Thanx ... but i got a question ... wat does PLP mean lol ??