Land Of My Past

by Dorotea©   Mar 26, 2005


As I look at the land I’ve always called home
Realization hits, this is where my beginning was sown
The meadows stretched out before me so vast
An impulse, I cannot stay for it’s the land of my past

Though pain would arise if I broke this bond
Curiosity born, a sudden wonder of lands beyond
Intrigue arises from the depths of my heart
Feelings uncovered, with my past I must now part

A gentle breeze brings many memories so sweet
Hesitation strikes, do I know the right path for my feet?
Doubt streams into the empty corners of my mind
Unsure destiny, in a new land what might I ever find?

A yellow butterfly lands on my sun burnt nose
Fluttering hope, I’ll take the road by where the river flows
I will follow the message of my heart’s voice
My destiny, I know my life has been the right choice

© Sonja von Bell~ I'm still working on this poem, I'm not happy with the ending and the flow needs some work.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Patrik

    personally I don't think you should change the poem. I know people read poems in a different way and experience the flow and rhymes in different way. My way of reading gave me a sense of great flow, beautiful rhymes and excellent work on this piece. Also the lines syllables worked well together, not to many or to few in different lines.

    Best wishes,
    Patrik

  • 18 years ago

    by Ria

    Why?It's a very nice ending!But if you think you can make it better, do!Again, you have a talent in description.I like it when the style of a person's pooetry is obvious even when you have read only two poems.It shows you are not toying with the idea, and that you write maturely. I really like your work

  • 18 years ago

    by Shawn Williams

    You are 15? Thats unreal. Thats a great poem for any age let alone for a lady so young. Keep up the writing...superb talent.

  • 18 years ago

    by Aubrey

    that was really good!

  • 18 years ago

    by Aubrey

    that was really good!

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