Very nice. I love that poem.

I felt that the poem started out really strong, nice established rhyme scheme and nice flow. But, in the middle of the poem, the rhyme scheme changed and the poem started to go down hill. After that minor problem, however, towards the end when the rhyme scheme was reestablished, it flowed very nicely again. Good job, keep writing!

That was a great poem, really powerful and moving... keep it up

thiis poem addresed an important issue
you might want to check this line
by doing this he keep escaping the law
kept

or would keep
or try this
But he'd uttered it all before,and he saw
by doing this he would escape the law.

Great poem, I'm glad you finally left him =0) Hope that you are ok....Really powerful!!!

Yes thanks for your suggestion Micheal it was meant to read KePt, so thanks for pointing that out..... I do however like you suggestion for those new lines, i think it adds to it and emphasizes my point..... Thanks i'll change that and put an * next to it so everyone knows that it was your line:)

And thanks to everyone who has commented it really means alot!

Love you crazy;)
Tash
xoxox

very good =) thanks for reading my poems! it really meant a lot ot me.. keep it up! hugs and take care
*I voted a 5 for this one*

wow such a powerful poem. Very moving and full of emotion. it flowed beautifully. take care

Hussain

hmm this is a very nice narrtive but the rhyming seems forced in some places..though i think using dialogues in a poem is quite interesting n unique

Powerful poem! Hope everything is ok! Exellent job! Take Care and stay strong! Brooke 5/5

great poem. It flows better than any other poem I've ever read...maybe its cause my eyes are tired, lol, but, anyway, GREAT poem. 5/5.

You really didn't follow a rhyme scheme...Or you followed two or three at the same time...lol...

Good work, though.

Wow that is very inspirational, i'm glad you free of that jerk now, and i'm sure in the long run it mad you stronger, i'm proud of you. Your poem was very well written.

it was a really great poem.... it was strong, i saw any man who harms a woman should b in jail..... the first time he put his hand on me tho, it would b the last coz i wouldnt b there anymore...he'd b lonely mr.lonely he'd have nobody to call his own!

Wow... awesome poem! definetly 5/5!!
im so sorrry if this is from real experiecnes that u went thru. that really sucks!
but great job and thanks for the comment on my poem!!
hannah

Wow.. this is one of the best i've read so far! its such an amazing poem! it starts off with such emotion and powerful words and stays strong all thru and right to the end.. you had me hanging on every word! this is a sad poem but its inspirational because of the way it ended .. it such a great a poem about courage and abuse.. i loved it!!! amazing write keep it up =)

--emotionless19.*

Wow, yey, finally, I have read a poem about exactly that! I always wanted to, dont know why..