I tried

by ScarletHaze   Apr 26, 2005


I tried to be what you wanted me to be
but i couldn't keep up the facade
i tried to let you change me
but i couldn't keep it up
i tried to be happy for you
but i just felt more upset
i tried to stop cutting for you
but now the scars are on the inside instead
i tried to make normal Friend's for you
but instead i just felt more alone
i tried to become normal myself
but i became lost under the surface
i tried to be this whole new person for you
but it was just killing me inside
so when all this failed i just tried to be myself
but thats when i lost you.

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  • 18 years ago

    by broken angel

    I actually really like this. A lot. That's all I can say, because if I get started on it, all the positive things will never end. (p.s. rhyming is way too overated. Keep it just the way it is. You wrote it from the heart, so keep it that way. Besides, you can lose the meaning in trying to make it rhyme. Personally, I can't write non-rhyming poems, so you having that ability is a step ahead of me.)
    Luv always, KT

  • 18 years ago

    by Kevin

    I totally get what you're saying here, and far be it from me to say what a poem should and shouldn't be. But when i started reading this poem, i was suprised it didn't rhyme at all...like not once....if i were to offer you any advice to improve the piece...given that it's pretty standard in every other regard..it would be to make it rhyme as sweetly as you can.

    regards.

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