This is great... It's so deep. Unfortunately, my parents wouldn't really care if I were to end my life... they're not the "parent" type. If you can please read some of my poems as well... I would really appreciate it. They're much like this poem. Great job once again 5/5

~ Tina

This is a really amazing poem! The one thing wrong is that the rhyming is too much. This is a sad and depressing poem and you should focus more on the poem than the rhyme. You probably don't want this from a 13 year old but I thought id tell ya. Well great job anyways!
Take Care........
Haily

Very sad poem! I found one thing wrong read line 8 again. It was almost like a short story. Had very good meaning to it really opens your eyes. Good work! Take Care~ Brooke

luv it

There were a few rhymes that sounded a bit stressed.You might want to try a ABCB pattern and see how that goes. Nicely written and good story though.
-A

this is a powerful piece, but wow. great job. i have not seen talent in a long time, but u got it my friend.

that is really powerfun. it brought a tear to my eye. i have actually thought about that sxact concept many times which has kept me in this world. you did a very good job of translating it into a poem. Keep up the good work and thanks for commenting on mine.

crap
why must you focus on the dark ugly parts of life?
Its harder to find the joys in life, I know, but if you try you'll find the're much more rewarding
PLEASE TRY
hugz anyway!

Great poem! 5.0 ♥

that was amazing. a few spelling mistakes. but stll very well written.5/5
~Freak~

robert,

a beautiful sad written, yet so heartfelt emotions.....keep them coming and thanks for the beautiful comment on mywork, much appreciated! have a good day, take care...

love freedom,
clouds.~

I'm specchless, I have no words in my mouth. This was so....AMAZING!! I can't believe how well written this is, very beautiful and sad at the same time. This poem really made me cry and it made me think about the times I tried to take my life.....Great poem, it deserves so much more than 5

I had to stop the tears from flowing, or the PC would blow up!! Fantastic job, i am really impressed. 5/5

Wow...that was really really really good, I've tried it before too but uhh it's never worked...

that was brilliantly written. it made me question my life and all of the things i've been doing in my life lately. thanks for making me question it.

that is an excellent poem n a very sad one too! thank u 4 commenting on my poem 'the pain inside' it meant alot to me tho it is not the way i look at life but it used to be anyway great work 5/5
emmah xoxo

I Absolutely Fell In Love With This Poem!!!! Great Job 5/5 xoxo-Nikki-xoxo

Such a powerful way to describe the affects of suicide. Loved every bit. You defently have talent. Keep it up xxx

inspirational writing...unique, it made me think, you expressed your feelings through writing just how its meant to be, very talented...

This was amazing I loved your such a good writer. You have a lot of talent 5/5 and thax for the comment
Love always,
Elissa