so much emotion, so much talent keep writing, love ya Becky

I like the use of asking questions within your poetry, it works well.

Keep Writing
Nici

ty very much nici

I enjoyed this one. Parts of it remind me of my past. :) on to your next ones. :D doing great so far babe!

This was very good too. Hon you got tallent. You know the saying your your worst cridic. I know I am mine. So chin up and keep writing.

hey cool poem... for you.. i think you said you wanted help, i'm not sure.. well.. try writing a structured poem.. a rhyming one.. then you will get the flow and then your "free verse" or poems like these will have a larger impact on the reader!! but i really love your creativity!! AWESOME!

maybe you could check out some of mine!!??

aww that was cute 5/5

Another great poem! This one reminds me of my son. I was with his father for 9 years. The love that came from that relationship was my son! Once again a job well done! I look forward to reading more of your work! ~Brooke~

i thought it was a great poem, and i know how u feel when u ask how can u love someone, cuz ive been there 2, great job!!

Excellent poem! that was very powerful. I know how you feel. Great job. xxx

i liked this one. it had good emotion!

all poems have a flow, but either it's good or it's not...and this one is right in the middle...it's not horribly bad, but it's not absolutely perfect either...but nice idea, good word choice! keep it up!