Fighting Soldier

by abcede   Jun 10, 2005


The night was young
i hadn't turned back
from the crackle of guns
fear is what i'd lack

as i turned to the west
and to the yellow sun fading
i knew it was time
death, i know, was waiting

i ran into the fight
just wanting a chance
to help claim our victory
this was my last dance

indeed i was right
the enemy shot me down
i slid into the darkness
without any sound

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  • 18 years ago

    by Emily

    Clear image and soo depressing. 5/5!

  • 18 years ago

    by Ashley Van Eperen

    o.o that was really good..i loved the rhyming...and the format helps it flow. i loved the last part..."indeed i was right, the enemy shot me down. I slid into darkness without any sound"

    it was short, but full of emotion. i loved it! 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by =)~ BJ ~(=

    dont know exactly what kinda fight this is but makes me think of my husband in iraq, so that means its gud, real gud.

  • 18 years ago

    by Lonely Heart .ღ.

    well wirtten :)

  • 18 years ago

    by Rolo

    It was short, but it flowed very well. The rhymes weren't forced either. It could be longer, but I very much enjoyed it. Thank you so much for all of your wonderful comments, I really appreciate it. 5/5.

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