Sometimes

Thats really a nice ending..u knw i felt forced words when it was the part about sighing... but then i didnt care a lot when i saw ur final lines... it was simple but so enjoyed the msg made me think about with what u have written .

i like this one too
5/5

Wow, this poem was very emotional and meaningful at the same time. One thing that stood out was in this line:
Sometimes you may swear.

Swear seemed to be out of the flow, but that might just be me.
I don't know what else to say, other than keep it up :D 5/5

Hatori
The Illusionist

P.S. Are you allowed to actually swear in a poem?

Very agreeable, the emotion is clearly evident. I was sucked in as if I was part of the story somehow and only wish it were longer. Flow was good. The ending kind of left me hanging but it was a nice read. 5/5 no problems that I could find

It had a fast flow to it.
Anyway, it’s written a long time ago. Now, you can write poems much better than this.

Marjan

Great poem. it is very true. i really liked this poem. 5/5