hmm very interesting...lol

Hey that is pretty cool how you can write when you are drunk, where did you find that talent?...the poem was really interesting, and in the long run some of it makes sense if you think about it for a while...excellent write. Just take care of yourself. lol.

"thinner then air" (then should be than)...I kinda like this poem, considering you are drunk. I think a LOT of people can relate to this poem...tired of stupid, ignorant love. Perhaps you could check out my poem "untitled 4"? I saw your ad in the discussion board area and wondered if you could return the favor.

Great write.

--christa//no motiv?

haahah thats not half bad man!.. it reminds me of the song our band wrote when we were drunk.. and we kept it and it kicks ass.. so dude.. 5/5 for kicking ass

A good poem. A few typ'os you should to fix.

haha i liked this poem...nice..

Hey. This is good, i like it great job. If u can will you please rate my poems thanks..

great poem, i like it!

love & hugs

You couldn't have been that drunk unless the
unconscious poet within you decided to come out. Just the fact you were drunk displeases me, but the poem is pretty good. It's a shame when a talented person like yourself goes destroying his brain cells...pity.

"Hold it in you hands"

Should be "your hands."

Take care of yourself. okay?

xxx

Maturity is present
I want to find a wife
But all these stupid girls
Just stick me with a knife

that was my part
it was a greatpoem, i really loved it!!! i was trying to comment and vote on revamped but i am on the school computer and it wont let me read 'locve' poems so i will comment on it when i get home!!!

Lucy***