no leave it the way it is. i think it's beautiful and touching. it takes a lot to say all that and i applaud you
~*Freak*~

aww. thank you so much. i will then. :)

xxx

wow... this was amazing! freak is right, it's beautiful... LONG! but beautiful. congrats on your first award, too! yayy!

Thank you so much! ^

Love,

undying blusher

xxxx

no your poems are not confusin at all..i liked them actaully..there really good..keep writing..you should read my poems sometime

xoxoxo DiNaAa

No I dont think you should seperate it at all, Its beautiful...I feel ur pain in it and a sense of grieving regret, awesome job

keep the way it is. its vrey well done good wrk. keep it up.

Thats a very good poem!

I liked the way your wrote this poem.
very well presented and so sad.
love you,
marjan

I love this poem because it shows appreciation towards parents. I really wish all kids can see what their parents have done for them. This is an amazing poem. Long, but with purpose.

Summed up, that was a very good poem. Long version, you really expressed yourself well and i could sympathize with you in alot of ways. Good Job.

I have to agree with most everyone else. Although this is a long poem, it has a purpose, and I like it just the way it is. Take care, I hope to read more soon.

I don't think it should be in seperate poems. I like the feel and rythm of it. It's like you were writing down whatever was on your mind, and thats the kind of poems I like, because they have a lot of emotion and there meaningful. great job. I especially liked this part.

"And screaming “I love you, too”
Always have to say “too”
For some reason that bugs me"

It made me think about the meaning that comes with those words.

Take Care,
Renee

I agree with these guys keep it the way it is, and also how you feeling these days. I put you as one of my favourites aswell. Keep up the good work. xxx and if you fancy a chat email me aswell xxx

That was wonderful. I'm sure that your parents love you no matter what. Thanks for writing it...it give me some advice. Thanks!!! I love your poems. Keep writing. xoxo Bye

neways jason my best friend gave me his jacket n i was jsut walking around the boat bymyself

what?? ^

An excellent poem! It was quite long, but worth the time. The emotion radiates from the words! Genius!

I love it just as one poem...

this stanza though didn't work too well...

They poke
They prod
They get not what they need
Not what they’re searching
No one knows thus far
I continue hurting

But the poem shouldn't be separated i don't think...it's like...organized chaos...great job on this you've really got the words to make it great...KIU!

xoxo-Sierra Rae

I think this is a very good poem.. leave it together and let ppl use their imaginations to separate it themselves...:) 5/5