It sounds like you have had a hard life, but i am proud of you for not giving up. I hope you have a nice life in the end. Very good poem, 5/5.

OMG.. this is so sad.. am so sorry it is true and it happened to u.. evry1 deserves a gud life and a protected home.. but i reli lovd this piece.. i like "my life is a story
written in rhyme"
keep up the gud work
nouna

I am really sad you have to go through this life like this but your a strong person and you have a talent when all else fail take the gift you have and work it for maybe in the future you may help others that was in your situation well I guess that what drives me to write keep it up and take care...

im sry your life is like this and you are going through alot from your mom and brother and now your father, but one day when you finally can move out find a goal move on to a better life and you can fight your suffering and pain... excellent poem and if you ever want to talk my sn is wildchic718 bii

aww... im sorry if this is your life... you should find a way out if he is beating you or anything close to that... or worse than that... ur poem was really good... short but good, and thats a lot coming from me cuz i tend to not like short poems... but you did wonderful, 5/5
amanda

I'm sorry that's your true story...makes me feel more fortunate even though I've been through a lot, my parents are there and love me and...so thanks....hope you're okay. Great poem.

xxx

great poem!!!

So sorry to hear you had such a rotten life. Keep your head up and walk tall !!

Wonderfully deep and well written. *gently hands over a deep vibrant red rose, and a sweet black one*

Aw this is so sad.....5/5

My, that was an excellent read.

I like how it's not complicated and the meaning behind the whole poem.

I hope it's not a realistic experience. =(

I especially like this stanza:

"So on lonely nights
Or, I guess, all the time.
I'll grab my good pencil
For another sad rhyme. "

Many people write to escape pain.

( )_( )
(='.'=)
(")-(") Arrivederci!

This was totally awsome...i loved the flow....5/5

Oh wow hun i am soooooo very sorry about you mother and your brother.. thats hard.. but with this new family have you tryed to get help about the father. you should not be put in the place you have been through enough. if you need some one feel free to email me any time. nice poem love the flow keep it up. i hope things get better i wish there was more i could do.

This was great i really hope its just a story if this is true im so sorry but it is a great poem it seemed like it flowed right out of you i think this is my favorite its perfect great job

Awwww, such a sad poem!!! But it was great! Keep up the great work!
~BJ~

Ur in my favs, lol I didnt even realize it, I havent read any of ur poem in a while, keep it up 5/5

Beautifully written
i loved readin this.
good flow
keep it up
5/5
love
amy

Oh my.. I'm so sorry! That's horribly sad.. I got in a car wrek (not a horrible one though, we were lucky) and now I'm overly cautious.. even though I'm not doing the driving yet.

5/5 Excellent write! Again I love the flow. I love the message behind it.. keep writing, and I hope you're okay.

Saiya

This is sad...i hope this is not true...but i feel like it is true...if it is i am sooo sorry...this poem is really good and i don't think anyone can change the way you write...5/5...u r very passionate..keep it up

That was very sad, as I'm sure almost everyone would agree, and I hope that it is not true.
If it is then I don't blame you for writing dark poetry, but if it isn't, you're a very talented writer.

Good Writing!
beth