Letter to my love.
by Wintersolstice Jul 8, 2005
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It has an old fasioned way of writing throughout you may notice. Enjoy! |
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15 years agoby Cyber Saiyan
Overall the writing is pretty good.
I really liked the old form of writing, but it seemed to be mixed up between old and new verse. Example: you used SHANT, but later used SHALL NOT. SHANT seems like an old verse word to me where shall not isn’t. I would try to pick one and stick with it.
Otherwise, a great job.
I enjoyed the powerful words like POLLUTE and BLUNDERS. They really add meaning to the lines. -
15 years ago
by Brittany C
I loved how you wrote it in old fashion. It is not something that you see everyday. It was refreshing. I really liked this poem and I saw nothing wrong with it. I gave it a 5/5.
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17 years ago
by Tricky Daze
Really interesting and sad,i really liked that and i agree some kinda old fashioned for a good way
Well done
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17 years ago
by Kaylee
Something different: Gave an old fashioned feeling. Fraid I won't be much of a help as the poem in itself was good.
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17 years ago
by Sean Allen
"Please forgive the common above pun."
I think 'above' and 'common' were swapped or something.. the wording isn't grammatically correct, even if this is written in an older style.
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"Before it take its cruel tole upon my health."
'toll' not 'tole'
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"Nay, I won’t have it perfect deer"
'dear' not 'deer'
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Strong ending, and definitely gave me an 'old-time-y' feel.
