Comments : If I ever

  • 18 years ago

    by Andrea

    this was a good poem. good rhyming

  • 18 years ago

    by Stephen

    Nice Poem I Liked It Keep Up The Good Work!!

  • 18 years ago

    by Wintersolstice

    Understad how much you care for this person, You would give your life for him right? He's part of you, actualy he is you. Well expressed through this poem. Deep and well thought out. X

  • 18 years ago

    by Natalie84

    You don't need anyone's suggestions to make this better. It's perfect. So heart felt and sweet! Excellent write.

    There is one minor thing I'd suggest...just that you don't really need the commas after each line.

    What a wonderful poem! :) 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Brookeღ

    Beautifully written! The flow and rhyme was perfect. I don't have any suggestions on this poem! Nice work! Take Care! Brooke! =)

  • 18 years ago

    by Britney

    This poem is excelllent! I dont think there is anything to change it's great how it is. 5/5! And simply lovely.

  • hey that was a very good poem. and it is so true when you find someone that you really care about. great job. keep writing.
    Crystal

  • 18 years ago

    by lilia

    omg thats soo cute!! i loved it. keep it up. also check out my poems if u get a chance. thankss

  • 18 years ago

    by MiMi

    Thats good and i know how u feel gurl i have a man and i dont know what i would do if he left me.

  • 18 years ago

    by Jessie Mae

    I really like this poem. Thats exactly how i feel with my b/f Josh. Keep em coming!!!!!

  • 18 years ago

    by Clouds n ur Is

    Excellent poem. Loved it.

    Clouds n ur Is.

  • 18 years ago

    by Jenn

    this is really cute! i love it!

  • 18 years ago

    by Anastasia

    I love this poem almost made me cry

  • 18 years ago

    by InMyWorld

    very sweet i liked it :)

  • 18 years ago

    by Hans Fausto

    sweet poem...the feelings it emotes are touching...nice one! :D

  • 18 years ago

    by amelia

    Wow isnt this poem amazing ???? i wonder who couldve given it any vote less than 5...clearly one of the best poems in this site !
    great job ! 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by *~* kelsey

    Hey. that was awesome. written really well. it had great rhyme and rhythm. awesome! 5/5

    kelsey
    xoxoxox

  • 18 years ago

    by enfant du tordu chagrin

    Another touching piece. Well Done

  • 18 years ago

    by Lost & Delirious

    This is a really sweet poem, I love it, has a cute message, keep writing.

  • 16 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Awwww, i think this is my fave so far, i feel this way about someone too and i cant believe you have worded it so well. thank you for sharing your poems i think you have a very good talent xxxx